Friday Fictioneers-The Earth is Like a Child

gnarled-tree

“It is spring again. The earth is like a child that knows poems by heart.” ― Rainer Maria Rilke

Evan places his hand on Marnie’s pregnant belly. She releases a sigh and leans her head against the gnarled tree. The glow of springtime sun warms both their bones, and hearts. The baby kicks and rolls under Evan’s exploring hand. Marnie giggles with delight.

Their road to happiness was fraught with uncertainty; Miscarriages, hormone injections and IVF. Once they gave all that up, they somehow got their everyday miracle.

“Sweetheart, are you afraid he won’t make it into this world?”

“Honey, I do believe this time we are blessed.”

In that instant, Marnie feels the tightening of her first contraction.

100 words (Genre: romance)

Thank you Rochelle for bringing us Friday Fictioneers. It’s her 50th FF post, so give that woman some kudos, please. The photo is brought to you by none other than Scott from  KindredSpirit23’s blog. When I first saw it, I wondered what the hell I was going to write, but a story came to me after all.

Please know I take criticism very well. Do your best or worst, as the case may be.

By the way, my first published and paid download (On a Hot Summer Night) through Etherbooks.com is on the bestsellers list. Thanks to all of you that purchased and read it. XOXOXOXXOXOXOXOXO

47 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers-The Earth is Like a Child

  1. The word “that” is a modifier (as in I’ll take that blouse instead of the blue one), when you use it to link parts of a sentence it is grammatically incorrect (although more & more accepted now). “Sweetheart, are you afraid that he won’t make it into this world?” makes just as much sense & is more pleasing without the word “that” – “Sweetheart, are you afraid he won’t make it into this world?”
    This was a lesson I learned at my cousin’s knee – he was a writer & this was one of his pet peeves & now mine. He called it lazy writing. Hope I didn’t offend you – you did say you welcomed criticism. I hope you find this helpful.

  2. This reminds me of the way people who are trying to have a child and then decide to adopt often have their own child not long after that. Hope the baby is healthy. Congratulations on your e-book and happy birthday.

    janet

    • That’s how my sister came to be. My parents adopted me and then she was born nine months and one day later. Seems Mom was already pregnant when they got me.🙂 I hear it happens a lot. Like the pressure is off and here comes baby.

      Thanks for the compliments honey. I need to write me a sad story. It’s been awhile…. Maybe something angry.

  3. Dear Renee,
    A simply delightful story. I love the miracle of pregnancy and childbirth. Firsthand experience three time.😉
    Shalom,
    Rochelle
    PS I love your lilac and butterfly background. Nothing smells sweeter than a lilac.

    • Thanks dear. Lilacs are my favorite. I have a story on my blog about stealing lilacs from city property in the middle of the night. The bush is flourishing in my back yard. I can’t wait for it to bloom. There’s nothing like their scent wafting in the spring air.

  4. Renee this was lovely. I especially liked ‘the baby kicks and rolls under Evan’s exploring hand. What beautiful memories that evokes. Congratulations on your writing success.🙂

  5. Such a warm story, with a description of what the couple had been through to get pregnant. I like the comparison of the Earth to a child. And congrats on making the bestsellers list! Well done!

    • Glad you liked it. This time of the year, I always yearn for a baby. I’m too old for that though. Bring on the grand babies some day.

      Thank you for the compliment on making the best seller list. Please download my free story, Sounds of Orioles and the Taste of Lemonade. It’s a free app called Etherbooks.com.

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