Friday Fictioneers-Freedom in the Forest

 

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I go to nature to be soothed and healed, and to have my senses put in order.-John Burroughs

‘There is freedom in the forest, not afforded in any city.’ Damon had told her that, but Rhiannon didn’t believe it. Until she slept next to him under the stars last night, a bonfire warming their bones.

She requested a vacation together. The Caribbean Sea and a hotel on the beach. He asked for something simpler, purer. With some trepidation she consented.

Now here she was, seated before a fire she’d made, sipping coffee. The sun rose through the trees, painting Damon’s sleeping face with the colors of morning. Heart brimming with love, she went to him.

100 words/Genre: romance and nature (I guess)

Thank you  Rochelle Wisoff-Fieldsfor hosting Friday Fictioneers. It is an honor and a privilege to have Ms. Rochelle critique my work. Please be sure to go to her page and read their stories too. We are a rather eclectic group and the genres run the gamut.

I welcome kudos and criticism. Happy reading.

30 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers-Freedom in the Forest

    • There’s no reason for more Perry. Draw your own conclusions. Giggle. In my mind, all she did was crawl back in the sleeping bag with Damon and enjoy the warmth of being completely loved. What more is there than that?

      Love, Renee

  1. Lovely story Renee, nice to see you back. Hope your recovery is progressing well, and with time on your hands maybe we’ll see more of you at FF. Take care, keep your spirits up.

    • Hi Sandra,

      I’m glad to be back. I was worried I was done writing. Can’t say this story was very good, but the photo prompt inspired me. I’m not one for the outdoors, but if the right man were to change my mind who knows what could happen.

      I’m healing slowly but surely.

      Love, Renee

  2. This stuff is like a drug, Renee. Great natural contact high — the right way. Makes me want to find a girl and go camping. 😉

    And it takes place outside — which seems to suggest we all have cabin fever! Wonderful job!

    • Thank you my friend. What kind words to say. I’m glad you liked the story. I could have elaborated but I only had 100 words to work with. Giggle.

      Go find a pretty girl and go camping.

      Love, Renee

    • It’s not often I kill off my characters. LOL

      Warm and fuzzy is exactly what I was going for. But with substance. I hope that’s what you took away from it.

      Love, Renee

  3. Dear Renee,

    It’s with great joy I welcome you back home. Good to see you back with hopes for your complete recovery. You’ve been faced with many dragons this year already and I hope to see them all slain at your feet.

    Love the story, the feeling of peace and love. It goes with your blog backdrop.

    And now the moment you’ve been waiting for, right? Just a couple of technical things that you have every right to disagree with.

    “There is freedom in the forest, not afforded in any city. Damon had told her that, but Rhiannon didn’t believe it. Not until she slept next to him under the stars last night. A bonfire warming their bones.”

    I’d out quotation marks around Damon’s statement. Then. …Rhiannon didn’t believe it until she…(take out Not) comma after night, a bonfire warming their bones.

    Again it’s great to have our romantic back among us.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    • Dearest Rochelle,

      Thank you for all of the kind words and the constructive criticisms too. Of course my story flows better.

      I’m glad to be back and writing again. Now that I’m injured, I’m hoping to have more time to devote to reading and writing.

      I’m frustrated by this setback but know that God has a plan. There are divine changes taking place. I must be patient, but that’s not one of my virtues. I will endure.

      I promise I will try not to leave again. I hope every photo you post brings me inspiration. Thanks my dear for your kind words and all of your help.

      Love, Renee

  4. Whenever Rochelle gets to comment before me, she steals all my lines. 😦 But I loved the story and I’m thrilled you’re back. It’s been a rocky road in many ways, hasn’t it? But, to quote a Pink Martini line, “and now you’re back.” Don’t make a stranger of yourself. And yes, put “a bonfire warming their bones” with the sentence ahead. Don’t leave it hanging out there in incompleteness. 🙂

    Lots of hugs,

    janet

    • Hello my sweet,

      I did make the necessary changes. The story flows so much better now. You’re both right, that sentence was hanging out there and it deserved more notice.

      The road has been rocky yes, but I do believe that there are divine changes taking place Janet. Life is good. Even if I’m hopping around on one leg. The words are returning and my love of the writing is coming back.

      There’s a book that I want to write. I have a ton of notes to go through. Maybe this is my time to write it.

      I’m going to continue FF. Every picture tells a story. It’s up to us to bring them out.

      Love, Renee

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