Friday Fictioneers-Time for Absolutes

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Bleary eyed from fatigue and two vodka tonics, Janelle strained to read the text from David, her ex.

“I miss you Love.”

Melodious guitar music hid her sharp intake of breath. The years and miles dissolved as she remembered him, holding and loving her.

Outside, the scent of exhaust overwhelmed her, along with the drone of traffic in the city that never slept. A taxi hailed, she instructed the driver to deliver her to LaGuardia. She sent David her response.

“On my way Darling.”

She’d had enough of what ifs. It was time for absolutes. Finally, it was their time.

100 words/Genre: Romance, of course

Thank you  Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for hosting Friday Fictioneers. It is an honor and a privilege to have Ms. Rochelle critique my work. Please be sure to go to her page and read their stories too. We are a rather eclectic group and the genres run the gamut.

I welcome kudos and criticism. Happy reading.

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33 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers-Time for Absolutes

  1. Since it’s already been ex once, I hope they make it absolute this time. “Bleary-eyed” gets a hyphen, so you can use another word if you like. Nice to see you, Renee. Enjoy the weekend.

    janet

    • Hi Janet,

      I think they’ll make it. I thought bleary-eyed was hyphenated. Thanks for verifying. Now what word will I add, hmmmmm? Have a great weekend yourself.

      Love, Renee

    • Hi Nan,

      Thanks so much for the kind comment. I like nice. I like tragic too. Depends on my mood and the day. I’ve a feeling they’ll be okay. She’s waited awhile for him to come back to her and shes tired of dealing with the what ifs in life. Time for absolutes!!!

      Love, Renee

  2. Dear Renee,

    Good descriptions in this one. I find myself a little nervous about a reunion and hope things work for the. I’ve seen it happen. 😉

    One nitpicky thing…maybe it’s just me…the sharp intake of breath put me in mind of a car, ie intake valve and felt clunky.

    At any rate, you are an incurable romantic. It’s a good thing.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    • Dear Rochelle,

      I’m thinking about elaborating on this story, so I will make the change you suggest. I need more than 100 words to tell their story. I hope it comes true. Sometimes, the best love stories do.

      Love, Renee

  3. I hope they have better luck with their relationship this time. Sounds like she had a long think about it but she’s taking the plunge and giving it a second go.

    • She completely changed her life. Removed herself from him and his world. Not by her choice, of course. It seldom is by her choice. I think I’ll elaborate on the story, it deserves to be told.

      Love, Renee

  4. It seams I am the only one who sees a trace of despair and defeat in her tired soul and two vodka tonics, like she is trying to run from the unwelcome caos of her life. Excellent job with your story, I found layers and layers of emotions in there.

    • There is incredible despair and defeat, because she knows how much time they’ve lost. They can never make it up. But they sure can live the best they can for the rest of their days. Isn’t that anything all of us can hope for?

      Love, Renee

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